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“Bait and Switch” (deconstruction): A “Criteria-Driven” Story from Square One

First… my apologies for being slow in getting this deconstruction up to full speed.  I hope to pick up the pace next week.

I’ve been thinking about it — a lot — and one thing keeps bubbling to the surface as I juggle parts and plot point and protagonistic proclivities.  And that one thing, I’ve come to realize, is what was behind it all.

When a message keeps knocking, I try to pay attention. 

If you’ve swan-dived into the Six Core Competencies playbook, you’ll know that I like to say that our stories are born — that very first spark of “idea,” whatever its form — in one of the four elemental core competencies of concept, character, theme, and structure.  (That last one, when it happens first, is usually a true story — “this or that really happened, and I’d like to tell that story…” much like the movie “Miracle,” about the 1980 US Hockey team — while the first three are perhaps equally responsible for most of what we see in bookstores and theaters.)

I can look back at everything I’ve written (including the unpublished stuff) in the way of fiction and assign that first moment of “idea” to one of those core competencies.  In fact, I’ve written books from three of those most likely four.

Some like to argue this point (read the reviews of my book, there are folks out there eager to argue with anything in this discussion), but I believe that when a writer isn’t sure where their story started, it’s because that very first spark was so powerful it quickly ignited a fire that engulfed one or more of the other core competencies, making them seem to be inseparable or simultaneous. 

A great concept can lead you to a great hero so fast you can’t tell which is which.  In fact, the same may be true with any combination of first spark sources… and it doesn’t really matter.  This is good, when the universe seems to have gifted you with two or even three of the six core competencies you’ll need, it’s a wonderful moment.

Even if it was, in that blink the eye, only one to begin with.  Doesn’t matter.

Unless it does matter.  Please allow me to explain.

It matters if you don’t understand that you need all six Core Competencies to be developed and executed and clicking on all cylinders before a story will work.

Stories are like people.  They’re complex and, when they function, they have multiple and essential parts.  That’s why it takes nine months to hatch one.

All that said… again… important as this is, it isn’t my primary point today.  It’s context and set-up for my point today.

What is my point is that residing beneath — or if you prefer, enveloping — your first spark of an idea and the ensuing other seeds for the remaining Core Competencies, there is the availability of a certain dash of magic that can infuse the outcome of your search for story — your creative choices — with power and poignancy and a significantly better chance at success.

In other words, there may be more to it than those Six Core Competencies.

Yes, ideas and the fallout from them are, when they succeed, highly qualitative.  Not all ideas are good.  Not all concepts are compelling.  Not all protagonists are heroic and empathetic, and not all journeys are deliciously vicarious.

They should be, but they’re not.

And that’s how Bait and Switch was born in my mind.

Not from one of the Six Core Competencies, but from an intention.

The first spark of creativity was actually the desire to manifest a story that knocked certain reading criteria out of the ballpark.  It was in the search for ideas that were good enough that I landed on the specific core competencies that would become the story itself.

This is subtle.  It may even sound like blithering esoteria to some.  But that’s how it went down in this writer’s mind.  It wasn’t as much about writing a bestseller as it was about writing a story I’d want to read.

Oh, how obvious this is.  And oh, how often this doesn’t occur to writers who are eager to succeed.

I was looking to deliver a certain kind of reading experience.  A certain brand of journey.  A certain flavor of hero.  A certain visceral, vicarious ride. 

This is the second time I’ve developed a story from this initial ambition.

Sometimes the story arrives on the back of that spark, and when it does you have to add the juice to it.  In the case of “Bait and Switch,” I began with the juice — the bar I wanted to reach, the flavor of story I wanted to write — and then went into search mode for an igniting spark that would belly up to that bar.

I’d been there before.  In 1990, while on the set of a video shoot, a bachelor for the night, I realized I wanted to go to a movie that evening.  I knew what was playing, and nothing on the local screens was the kind of film experience that would rock my world.

So I began thinking of the kind of movie that would, in fact, do that. 

That would send me straight from work to the Cineplex.  I began to churn on this.  I wanted something dark and noir.  With a devastating female villain.  With a hero who gets sucked into her web and has to beat her at her own game to survive.  A fantasy that collides with reality.

We can debate the psychology of this all day if you like, but that’s not the point.  The passion for this criteria — the itch it scratched — is, however, the point. 

The result was a movie script called “In Darkness Bound.”  I wrote it quickly, and the requisite creative decisions that would become my core competencies were completely driven by the criteria for the type of story I wanted to see on a screen.

A few months later that script landed me an agent.  Over a few years (and more than a few drafts) it received seven Nicholl Screenwriting Fellowship placements, including a finalist spot (top ten out of 6044 submissions) in 2002, after it had already been rewritten as a novel and published in the fall of 1999.

That novel, by the way, was a USA Today bestseller that made me a boat load of cash. 

All of this was as much because of the criteria that drove the storytelling as it was the elements of the story itself.

Hear this.  It can work for you, too. 

It did for me, again when it came time to write “Bait and Switch” in late 2002 into 2003.

I had a book contract but no story to deliver.  I needed one… desperately.  This is a risky position to put yourself in (though the reasons one finds oneself in that position is a good thing, I suppose), because it can lead you to settle.

In retrospect, I believe I had already settled.  Twice, in fact.  These were books #2 and #3, after “Darkness Bound” and before “Bait.”  They were fine, I hope (well reviewed), but they weren’t driven by that passionate criteria-driven search for story that books #1 and, ultimately #4 would be.

With “Bait,” I wanted a story that was vicarious

That was the driving thing for me.  A story that would take the reader out of the mundane and plop them into the sublime.  A story that would be theme-rich.  That would seduce them.  Put them in danger and force them to face demons.  Allow them to fly around in private jets, anticipate a payday measured in the millions, gain entre to an exclusive world populated by billionaires, geniuses and supermodels.

And yet, I wanted it, by the very nature of its vicariousness, to become catalytic.  To ask the reader to assess their values and moral compass as they assumed the persona of the hero along this path.  What would you do?  I wanted that question to remain at the forefront.

In fact, I wanted any assumptions attached to that answer to suck the reader into an ending that would validate and reward their immersion in the story.  According to the critics, it did just that.

All this before I had a clue as to what the story would be.

A decade earlier with “Darkness Bound” (in its initial pre-novel incarnation as a script), that initial passion-driven spark was a character.  The antagonist, in that case.

With “Bait,” the initial spark was a concept.  Which I quickly retooled into a compelling (for me) what if? question: What if a rich guy needed to negate a foolish pre-nuptial agreement by hiring somebody to seduce his wife?”

Imagine the lives, the personas, that would populate such a notion.

From there — and this is what happens when your “what if?” scenario is burning a hole in your head — other “what ifs? began to make themselves known, each auditioning for a role in the story itself. 

What is the pre-nup and seduction gambit had much bigger stakes than the billionaire’s position on the Forbes 400? What if there was a hidden, deadlier agenda?  What if my hero’s (the hunky seducer-for-hire) connection to this job offer was something other than coincidental?  What if his personal stakes became his motivation, over and above the millions already on the table?

The billionaire was loosely based on Larry Ellison, from a great distance.  Wolf was loosely based, on… well, me.  Can’t get more vicarious than that.

If you’ve read the book, you should recognize these elements. 

Some are conceptual, some are thematic, most are character-altering.  Just know that they were conceived in context to certain criteria, rather than simply being a cool idea.

I hope the power of this realization strikes you as it did me. 

It might even be an Epiphany in your career: the heat of the criteria that drives our creative storytelling choices are every bit as important, and indeed, destined, as what we put into the story itself.

“Bait and Switch” was my most critically-successful novel.  Not because of any genius of the story elements themselves, or their execution, but rather, because of the passion that summoned them and the high bar that drove them into being.

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Deconstructing “Bait and Switch”: The Double-Barbed Opening Hook

The second in a series of posts that expose and analyze the architecture of this novel.

A little business first.

Donna Lodge sent me a link to an interview with Kathryn Stockett (author of “The Help”), and it’s fascinating, scary and encouraging (writing often brings us a collision between those experiences). 

“The Help” was rejected SIXTY TIMES… click HERE to read about it.  And pay attention to Stockett’s final tip to other writers, it’s pure gold.

Also, at the end of this post you’ll find information on two workshops I’m delivering soon, both in Oregon.  Nice there this time of year, just sayin’.

Also (one more)… my buddy Randy Ingermanson (co-author of “Writing Fiction for Dummies”) publishes the largest writing ezine on the planet (over 27, 000 subscribers).   The latest issue is out, and, like all of his stuff, it’s worth your time… get it via Text or PDF.  You can visit Randy’s site HERE.

Okay, let’s do this:

The Opening Salvo in “Bait and Switch”

I’m a huge advocate of mission-driven storytelling. 

The mere existence of a structural paradigm for our stories – four parts, three major milestones, a handful of other strategically-placed narrative tent poles – creates a compelling path for our stories…

… and thus, a context that defines the mission of our scenes and the part in which they appear.

In other words, the scenes at the beginning of a novel are different than the rest of the scenes in the story.  They have a unique mission.  And they come from within a unique contextual expectation.

Some writers get this by instinct.  Some only get it when the principles of story architecture have been shown to them (like, right here on Storyfix and in my book), and then, from that moment on, they see it in every book they read and movie they see.

It’s like a lightbulb going off.  A cloud lifting.  The truth illuminated.  It’s architecture exposed.

It’s always there.  You can’t unsee it, you can’t deny it. 

And it’ll need to be there in your story, as well.

When I wrote “Bait,” everything about the mission and context for how the book opened was driven by this non-negotiable contextual architecture.

The Mission of Part 1 of Your Story

You should create a hook for the reader.  Something that makes them want more. 

You need to open a can of worms… lay the groundwork for an unfolding dramatic narrative (plot).

In Part 1 you must introduce the hero and show us a pre-plot point world view, including near-term goals (which will change at the First Plot Point).

You need to foreshadow.

You need to establish the world of your story.

You need to establish stakes, and on several levels.  The reader should be invested in the hero (root for him or her, empathize).   This is critical.

You have anywhere from 8 to 20 (or so) scenes to get this all down.  Because when you get to Part 2 (after the First Plot Point), the mission and context of those scenes changes.

Understanding these contextual differences between the scenes in each of the four parts of your story – which allows you to properly define the mission of those scenes – is a major key to advancing to a publishable level. 

All great stories do this. 

It begins with a hook.  In the case of “Bait and Switch,” I deliberately – strategically – opened with two of them.

The Two-Barbed Opening Hook

In mission-driven scene writing, even though they are infused with character, sub-text and voice, it is best to have a single mission in mind for each scene.  Doing so avoids random, sprawling narrative in the name of characterization, which is the bane of newer writers and unpublished manuscripts.

“Bait” opens with a Prologue.  It’s mission: to plant the seeds of a major corporate scandal and a cover-up that shows us these bad guys will kill to protect their secret.  Who dies, and how, is less important than the exposure of a cover-up that will become the heart of the plot.

The hero isn’t in that opening scene. 

The first barb of my dual-hook was plot-driven.

The next short scene is part of that hook: it is a thinly veiled intro of the character with a foreshadowing of the covert world he is about to enter.   More tease, more hooking.  By implication, this scene links to the Prologue… we know our hero will be in the center of all this darkness.

That’s barb #1: my intention was to hook you on the plot.  To want to see what this all means, where it will go, and how it will involve a hero we haven’t met yet. 

In the third scene (Chapter Two), we meet Wolfgang Schmitt, the hero of this story.  It uses first person narrative to sweeten the intimacy of the reader’s relationship with Wolf.  The story is actually very character-driven, despite a complicated (I’m told) plot, so this scene was critical.

It plays like a short story, a little mini-drama that really shows off Wolf’s character while setting the stage for plot advancement… which happens in the last sentence of the scene.

That’s called a cut and thrust, by the way.  A zinger at the end of a scene that has satisfying resolution in it (the scene is very Tarantino-esque), but is now history (background context) as the story quickly advances into the main plot thread.

That scene is the second barb of my opening hook strategy. 

By intention, we now love Wolf.  We relate to him.  He just did (in this scene) what we’ve all wanted to do in a business meeting from hell.  And now he’s on to a new adventure… the one foreshadowed by the Prologue and Chapter one.

None of those three scenes could succeed without an understanding of the context of the Big Picture of the story and the unfolding dramatic narrative (plot).  It’s all dripping with sub-text and context.

And yet, one of the barbs had a mission that exclusively targeted characterization, with that ending zinger. 

The context was all about him becoming vulnerable to the offer that would suck him into the story (pure Part 1 context stuff)… and the mission was simply to show us this guy and make us fall in love with him.

Every scene needs to forward the story.  The plot.  Characterization is the suit of clothes, the paint, that makes the scenes work.  That, and a little mini-drama that the scene presents and then resolves.

Mission-driven.  Contextually linked.  That’s the ticket… including your hook or hooks.

If you’d like to follow this in context to the book itself, you can get it HERE on Kindle (or navigate to your favorite e-reader; it’s available on Amazon, too, as a paperback).

Here’s the skinny on the two workshops I’m teaching in Oregon:

October 1st, in Medford, Oregon. 

It’s a two session (morning and afternoon) intro and overview of the Six Core Competencies, with a direct application to any WIP of the attendees.   How to put this into practice.

Email Alisa (write@transformation​alwriters.com) or Phil (p38messina@msn.com) for more info.  The workshop is sponsored by the Southern Oregon Willamette Writers.

October 29 – 30 in Portland, Oregon.  This is the whole Six Core Competencies enchilada.

It’s life changing.  Okay, it’s at least career changing.  And, as I like to say, slightly disturbing.

Click HERE for more on that one.

Hope to see you there!

More deconstruction of “Bait and Switch” to come.  If you’ve read the book and would like to chip in (on the hooks or anything else), we’d love to hear from you.

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